The Last Snow: A Mother's Love - Comments, page 5

As always you have outdone yourself. I mean oh the plot. The agony. Just a question. Aren't you tempted to end it with her going crazy?

@WednesdaysCoffin
You are absolutely correct when you say there's a thousand ways this could go. I'll be honest, I actually don't have the very end of this book planned out. I know what will happen always in advance but there's 3 main ways I'm trying to decide on how to end the story. All of which made me cry for a variety of reasons, haha. I will say one thing though especially after the new chapter I just posted - Bella and Tyler will always have a relationship that goes above and beyond anyone else.

I hope I did a well enough job explaining why she didn't hesitate that much on signing the contract, even if it was more in her subconscious.

Thanks again for your always insightful comments!!!

@BlackVeilsinWhite
Serious comment time.

Well, while I can see the allure of the "happy ending" for Tyler and Bella, yeah, it might go against what you've built up over the length of the story. What makes this so enjoyable, as a reader (who is also a writer, actually), is the fact that there are a 1,000 ways this could go. Bella could be playing along and, ultimately, escape again. Bella could fully submit. Tyler could throw a wrench into all of it and say, 'Fuck you guys!' and take Bella away. There are a zillion ways this can play out, which is what builds the suspense and tension for us readers.

It's interesting that she signed the contract with very little fanfare. I'm curious to see where you will take that, and you know I'll be here reading!

Happy Weekend!

Just want to toss this out there that if Bells needs a new plan, we can swap places. I'm willing to submit! lol

@Motionless.Rinio
Definitely submission, whether it's faked or is still in Bella's control. And as far as the second part....you'll have to wait and see!

@WednesdaysCoffin
That sounds like a deal!!!
That is funny, how they both kind of switched personalities for that chapter, I totally agree with you there.

As far as Tyler goes...I've definitely thought about ending the books that way- having Bella live happily ever after with Tyler- but then I thought about the fact that while he obviously loves Bella very much- he also has an alliance with the other band guys, and he does want to keep his loyalty to them to, after all they're his friends.

Sorry that turned kind of long, haha.

I hope you two continue to enjoy!

shit...... welp ... I think i smell submission and sexual satisfaction for bella coming right next chapter or the one after the next xD

@BlackVeilsinWhite
Well, I will keep the comments coming if you keep the writing coming! :D

I find it interesting - and this is merely a random musing of my own and not a commentary on your writing - that this chapter depicts Chris and Danny as the polar opposite of how I see them being in real life. I view Danny as the pompous ass, Chris as the super nice, considerate guy. Not that I know them personally, I do not. Just my observation.

As a reader, I feel bad for Bella. I want to scream at her that she can have Tyler without all this other bullshit. She can have Tyler and her daughter! Why does she need contracts and all these jerks? Of course, she needs that because that's the story . . . and I don't want it to end!

Lastly, everytime there's a mention of Chris taking her virginity . . . I get a little school-girl giddy. :P

@Motionless.Rinio
Each chapter definitley seems to be going in that diretion...

@WednesdaysCoffin
Oh goodness, don't be sorry! I appreciate seriously any comment ever!

I too was excited to bring Chris back, as well as Danny and others, as they're pretty fun to write about and include in scenes.

AS far as Kylie and Gaia go, I really didn't want them to turn on Bella, because then that leaves her literally zero people that have at one point but her in a bit of a sticky situation, but it kind of had to play out that way to get her back to Chris.

I can definitley promise you more Chris, and thank you again so much for your feedback <3

@BlackVeilsinWhite
Well, you definitely have readers, my dear. I'm sorry I was slow on commenting on Chapter 16, which I would have said, gasp, Kylie and Gaia are traitors! The fictitious Kylie and Gaia, anyway. No drama intended there.

And as for Chapter 17, I'm so glad to see the 'return' of Chris. Call me biased, but he would be my favorite of the men. :P

I don't see Bella giving up so easily - I'm sure she has a plan in mind and/or is merely humoring the boys for the time being while she drafts a plan. But, in my devious heart, I want the boys to 'win' and I want more Chris! lol

I think she will....

@WednesdaysCoffin
Thank you so much! It's worth a whole lot, considering the first time I posted on this site I figured no one would like or even read anything I wrote. It makes me so happy to find out that even one person thinks I'm doing a good job!

I hope as this book continues on, you still feel the same way!

@BlackVeilsinWhite
This was another great chapter. I think you're doing a great job, for what it's worth!

@Auroraaaaa
He will be in this story, but a long long ways away. His name might get mentioned a few times here and there, but I'll bring him back for a tiny bit in the end to explain how his story will end.

Is Chance gonna be in the story or your not going to put him in the story

Is Chance gonna be in the story or your not going to put him in the story

That's so cute

@WednesdaysCoffin
Thank you, I've been doing my best to try and build it up! I promise I'm super super close to getting to the book's first climax, so we're almost there!

Another great chapter, building that suspense! :)

@Auroraaaaa
Oh my goodness, I love that for Bella and Tyler! They deserve to be shipped at this point, haha.


@WednesdaysCoffin
Thank you! I'm glad that you liked the different pov, I definitely will do more of that in the coming chapters. I'm glad you liked that line, I put it in because I figured that would be the one question they were dying to get the answer to above anything else.

I'm just about to post another chapter, and hope everyone enjoys it!

Another great chapter! I loved that this was from Ghost's POV, which was unexpected and kind of cool. And this line made me laugh outloud: “Would you say that there was a happy ending?” Kuza wondered. Great job and thanks for giving me something fun to read when I got home tonight! :)