The Last Snow: A Mother's Love - Comments, page 4

@WednesdaysCoffin
Oh gosh, my bad! Now re-reading it I should have understood that the first time, my brain's refusing to fully function this week!

@BlackVeilsinWhite & @Motionless.Rinio

Ladies, I just wanted to clarify that when I said I would write people out of the contract, I meant *me*...Not necessarily Bella. It was a bad joke to say that I don't find a lot of these men to be even remotely attractive. However, that has nothing whatsoever to do with the story. I'm just a picky bitch! :D

@Motionless.Rinio
Thank you so much, I'm glad to hear you think that! I totally understand thinking there would have been more sex, since that's kind of all the band guy's favorite activity, haha. Like I told @WednesdaysCoffin there definitely will be some of that down the lane, and Chris will take a part in that to an extent. As far as the contract goes considering Craig and Danny basically helped Chris craft this whole thing from the very start, so they would kind of have to kick themselves out, and they're a little possessive of Bella. For the rest of the bands though you can kind of think of them as back up or even babysitting masters, since it's obvious that they don't play nearly a big of a role as MIW, ETF, and AA, but they all still have to be in the loop to do so. Anyways, I'll finish up blabbing by promising some Bella and Chris relatively soon!

@WednesdaysCoffin
You may have to wait for any type of sex for at least another few chapters, as I figured that's the one thing Bella will really hold back on, but I promise I'll make the wait up to you! I'm glad you liked that Chris was trying to reach out- that will be echoed throughout the rest of the guys, well all but one- and I'm sure you can figure out who.

I fully understand what you mean by writing for yourself, and I wish everyone could read that so they would know that and not get disheartened either! And as for TJ, anything with him is a threat to Bella. If she wasn't in a room with just about all of them, I'm sure she wouldn't have been nearly as willing to just go and try to appease everyone.

You once again have outdone yourself! I mean truly I would have expected more sex but me being a Chris Motionless girl, an imagining him in that suit, with his hair down... mmmmm please sir fuck me .... hahaha xD anyways, I believe that there will be some smutty smutty smut coming but I must agree with the user @WednesdaysCoffin, that people like Danny, Ronjie, Etf, or issues shouldnt be in thecontract anymore.... BUT!!! thats jus my own personal thought! Please continue! I yearn for more sexy momnts with Cbris, Motionless In White in general and maaaayyybbeeeeee just maybe some sexy Bella x Two or three members of the Masters session * wink wink nudge nudge * anyways again thank you for updating and oh my god im melting im seeing Chris Motionless with the whip ahhhh

@BlackVeilsinWhite
Alright, so no sex in this chapter but I can survive that. I like that Chris is trying to bond with Bella, be nicer, make up for things in the past. Even if his 5-6AM times are gross. I suppose the suit kind of makes up for the gross meeting time.

I'm glad I could provide a pinch of insight.

As for writing for yourself, I merely say that as a reminder because, from what I've seen here and at Mibba and Wattpad, comments on stories are in no way linked to how good the story is; like much in life, it's a popularity "contest". It pains me to see writers posting notes on their stories begging for comments or they will quit writing, because you should be writing for yourself. The collective "you," not you specifically. But I will spare you that lecture. I just bring it up as a kind of...reminder. That a good story isn't automatically commented on, so please never get disheartened.

Back to the story, I like that a night with TJ is the threat! :P "Shape up or we'll feed you to TJ!"

:D

P.S. I'm adding this after the fact: Doesn't TJ look short in the new ETF video? I literally went and looked up how tall he is, because he looks like a midget.

@WednesdaysCoffin
You are absolutely right about TJ in that new music video, they all actually are looking pretty nice, Craig especially!

Haha, it looks like sex wasn't on the agenda quite yet, even though I'm sure Chris would love that, as would many others.


@WednesdaysCoffin
I'm the same way, I love to hear what other people are thinking, and be able to openly discuss idea! That was in interesting look on their songs as well - that they're in a way a fantasy or a fanfiction as well - that made me listen to a lot of songs in a different light, but in a good way!

I'm truly glad you did comment, as I really do appreciate feedback, that's the only thing helping me realize what people really do think of the book!

That's very true - if you are writing, but not for yourself, it takes the joy out of creating something fun and whimsical, it just makes it more of a chore, which is no fun!!!

@BlackVeilsinWhite
I'm glad you love the idea! Either way, I just wanted you to know - as we don't know each other in the real world - that I don't get offended over dumb stuff. I like to talk, to share ideas . . . and if they inspire someone, that's amazing! If the other person reads the comment/idea and just shrugs and says, 'Not my thing,' that's fine too. It's all good! (I have seen some people's comments on the varying fanfic websites that kind of...scare me.)

As for fan-fiction, anyone who looks down on it as a genre of writing is just close-minded. Look at "Fifty Shades of Grey" - it's movies, merchandise, etc. That started out as a fan fiction, believe it or not. That author was a woman who needed an escape, and she dreamt up this BDSM-themed Twilight fanfiction that ended up earning her millions.

To use an example even closer to this particular story, look at MIW's songs throughout the years: "Undead Ahead," "Dark Passenger," "WASP," "London In Terror," etc. could all be considered fan fiction. Right? Who is to say that something fan-based isn't a valid form of art/writing?

I think it's wonderful that the creative release is helping you in life. I am exactly the same. I am actually a 'creative type' in the real world, and writing has always been my No. 1 love. That said, even when you spend your days being creative, you can still get a release out of losing yourself in your characters. I commented because, as one writer to another, I know what feedback means and how that can help us to get inspired to sit down and focus when real world obligations are sucking the joy out of everything.

All my rambling aside, I do love reading but please never forget to always write for YOU first and foremost. That's what's most important - not comments or feedback, but making yourself happy.

Okay, so before I comment like an intelligent adult, here are my random fan-girl thoughts:

1) Kuza and Ashley need to go in the cage for the alarm clock/waking up early fiasco!

2) Bella should know that she can take Ricky in a fight – a 3 year-old could beat Ricky! Have you seen the man? His thighs are the size of my wrists!

3) TJ, ugh. Although, I shamefully admit that he's looking kind of nice in the new ETF video.

4) It’s funny that Bella retires to the Supply Closet for safety – I literally just read another fanfic where Chris did the same. Odd coincidence.

5) “Just Chris” . . . . SQUEE!!!
Except 5AM? My god! Can’t sex wait ‘til at least noon? Very demanding, Christopher!

@WednesdaysCoffin
I don't like it, I love it! Right now it's just depending on how starting school again in the fall will go that will determine if there is another book. I've genuinely loved every one of your comments, so no need to worry :)

Hearing that makes me super happy. As silly as it may sound, writing these books have given me a creative outlet that I can't get in the real world, and hearing that people reading them are able to enjoy that makes all the time working on these stories worth it. I know some people think fan fiction is this awful thing that's like an abomination to writing, but in the end it's just another story, and this had ended up being a great platform to share stories with other people who have at least one thing in common with one another.

@BlackVeilsinWhite
If you like the idea, it is yours! I just wanted to say that I hope you know I won't ever be offended if I offer up a thought and you hate it and don't use it. I always assume that people know that, but everyone nowadays is so darn sensitive about everything...I just wanted you to know that I say things and if you like them, great. Otherwise, it's still cool. :D

I look forward to any and all updates, no matter what happens with who(m). Updates give me those few minutes in my week to sit down and lose myself in somewhere/something else.

<3

@WednesdaysCoffin
Oh gosh...i never thought of doing a story of what happened before Bella, what the bands were up to....I may have to play with that idea and see if I can get it to take off. Thank you for that idea, it's got me excited!!!

As for Tyler, I can promise at least a few cases where he will step up for Bella, especially when others start to 'train' her.

Bella definitely won't let TJ off the hook. if you read her thoughts during any moment ever, I'm sure adhere would be at least one way to get back at TJ would be floating around her head.

@BlackVeilsinWhite
Not a biggie, my dear. I was sitting here when the notification that you had updated came through, and I decided that was just the perfect way to start my weekend. :)

Glad I could provide comedic relief!

I totally understand why Tyler doesn't snatch Bella away - it would basically ruin the story and bring about a quick ending. At the same time, there is that hopeless romantic part of me that will always think, "Come on, Tyler, step up!"

If you're looking to do a new story that keeps these characters alive, that could be an avenue to consider: Tyler takes Bella away and now the two of them are being hounded by the bands. There's a million ways that could go. Although, initially when you said you might use characters to do a kind of spin-off, my thought, for what it's worth, was to go in more of a direction where there's a new Bella up against some of the bands. Or to take, say, Ronnie - totally a random choice - and do a "backstory" on what he was doing to girls pre-Bella. There's also going way, way back to the first book, taking one of the girls that was rejected when they chose Bella and bringing her back.

This, like everything else, could go a zillion ways! I know whatever you decide, it will be a wild ride.

As for "poor" TJ and the cage, not to tell you how to write your story but I kind of envision Bella getting the better of him somehow, he ends up in the cage, and then that leads to Bella's first major punishment under this new deal. Might be even funnier if she can manage to get another guy in there with TJ, as well. Any TJ torture is fun!

I'm shutting up now and I hope you have a great weekend!

@WednesdaysCoffin
Dang it, you beat me to the comments! Haha. I was just about to respond to your first one, sorry I was a little late to the game!

As for your comment for the last chapter, first off the "Do them all" comment made me cry I was laughing so hard- that was wonderful. In regards to Tyler with Bella and him 'sharing' her, it definitely only is like that because if he refused to share Bella, he'd probably just take Bella, hop a plane to Hawaii and live happily ever after with her, so for this story that couldn't really work to get us to this point in the plot.

You're absolutely right when you said it's hard to see an end in sight. I'm already telling myself that to keep the characters alive I might start a whole new story where there's just randoms bits and scenes from the books that didn't make it. Who knows if that will happen though, this story still has a long way until its end!

Now to the newest chapter - haha, I'm glad you liked it.

I'm in agreeance with you on the beard, I just figured that was the type of silly thing for Bella to notice.

And with TJ and the cage....not a bad idea at all. I'll rack my brain and see how I can fit that in, I kind of love that idea, and I'm sure Bella does as well!

Have a great weekend, and thanks again!!!

@Auroraaaaa
'Tella' is definitely still standing strong for now!

It's a great chapter! :) Now, let me offer up a few totally random thoughts/comments:

*I kind of like Danny's beard. Not that that has anything to do with the story, but yeah.

*I know absolutely nothing about real-life Craig, but fictional Craig is kind of a nice guy. I like him!

*Bella needs to find a way to lock TJ in the cage! Just because, TJ belongs in a cage! In fact, that would make for a great comedic scene, tables turned and TJ gets a dose of Bella's revenge.

That's all I've got. My brain is mush but I loved the update. :)

#tella❤️

@BlackVeilsinWhite
I have to confess that I read this the second I received the notification last night, but I've been sitting on it all day trying to come up with an intelligent, worthwhile comment. Because, of course, I want to cheer things like "SUBMIT!" and "DO THEM ALL!" but, you know, that seems worthless as far as comments go.

That said, I do question why Tyler would effectively sit back and share the woman he loves with so many other men. Yes, I understand that that's somewhat required for the story, at least to get it to the here and now. In a more realistic situation, if the man I love doesn't fight for me, then he's being tossed out the window pretty quickly. :P

As for not having the ending pre-planned, I understand that completely. Sometimes we just have to write and see where our muses take us. Clearly you've been working on this project, with these characters, for a long time, and I'm sure you are attached. It's not easy to see an ending in sight, sometimes.

Now, as for my silly, more fan-girly comments, I will say this: I would have written some of those dudes out of that contract so fast! There's no way I'm touching Ronnie or Danny or, fuck, anyone in ETF. I commend Bella for being open-minded about some of those ugly fuckers!

I'm glad you're updating regularly and I hope this comment made you smile!

@Motionless.Rinio
Oh, now I understand what you mean! I mean thats always a possibility, I'm not counting anything out yet! There's a lot of ways it could go still on the table

@BlackVeilsinWhite
yeah i get that.... but .... i actually thought of it like..... her driven to insanity.... or becoming rally submissive to where she forgets who she is

@Motionless.Rinio
Thank you very much!
And I can say that I really haven't thought of it ending like that. I feel like no matter what happens, crazy as it may be, things like Bianca, and her know proclaimed love for Tyler will keep her grounded in reality.