The Last Snow: A Mother's Love - Comments, page 2

@WednesdaysCoffin
First off, shame on this website, At this point it is waaaay over due for a spanking, haha.

I'm 100% certain you're right, if Bella ever fell in love with TJ the way she loves Tyler, pigs would be flying in a hell that has frozen over. Not only Danny, but all of the guys like you suggested want something different from Bella, and may still be figuring it out as their dynamic will start to shift to what they all kind of signed up for. As for Bella being in love with 50 men...you're right on that too, you can't be in love 50 men, that's beyond far stretching. However, while she may only truly be in love with a couple of them, she may find comfort in them, or find some characteristics that she values in others that may not be represented with some of the other guys.

I hope you enjoy the new chapter :D

@BlackVeilsinWhite
I have to say, I am NOT amused with the website: they never sent me the notification that you updated this! *grumbles* But I'm here, so YAY! I have to read it, but first:

It's okay for Bella to lighten to TJ. A little. I'm fairly certain that we won't see the day that TJ overtakes Tyler in Bella's heart, though. As for Danny, I have viewed that as . . . Tyler and Chris want something more from Bella than just sex. Maybe Danny doesn't want that kind of relationship. Which is fine, because it would be very hard to have Bella be in actual love with 50 men. *shrugs* I would pick Chris over Danny, too! :P

Thats a nice update! I can see that Bella is able to be a tease, but ohhhh she will have a lesson delivered which excited me! Hm.... As fo the vibrator scene, my god i thought poor chris would have it on his face as soon as she saw it !!!

@Motionless.Rinio
Thank you so much! As far as the dynamics go, especially when things get a little more hot and heavy, you'll come to see that they all kind of encompass a Daddy/ Sir / Master dynamic at certain points. I think TJ definitley won't forget about that punch... but we'll have to see :)

@WednesdaysCoffin
It's not just you, I promise, some of them are a bit more mature than others, just like any group of people that are close. Like you said though, when it's appropriate they thankfully do know when to behave themselves. She might be lightening up to TJ...hard to tell...she's been known to play nice just to get something she wants in the past. The Danny going into the background bit was a good thing to notice, as of now that is more of his personal choice because he would much rather 'play' with Bella if you will with no restrictions, whereas what Chris and Tyler are trying to do now are slowly tug her out of her comfort zones while still being a little cautious. You will come to find out in the next few chapters just how kinky some of those bones may be, of everyone involved!

Okay, so, for starters, any chapter entitled “Caged & Collared” grabs my attention immediately. *claps her hands excitedly*

Now, getting into the chapter itself . . . Is it just me or does the pairing of TJ and Craig together make you think of junior high-level antics? Cum in a smoothie being a prime example! I’m glad they behaved themselves here, though.

And Bella’s deal – punching TJ for her time in the cage – was brilliant! I’m sure he will indeed make her pay for that down the line, but now, I would like to high-five Bells! Although, in truth, it does feel like Bella is lightening up a tiny bit in her loathe of Mr. Bell. Maybe? (Hypothetical q there.)

As for Bella and Chris, their dynamic continues to be my favorite in the story. Yes, I am biased. However, they have one of the most intriguing dynamics. When Bella “hardens” her resolve, Chris seems to be the one to soften up and begin to admit his true feelings. Whereas, with Tyler, it’s an even-keeled relationship that is always good; there’s not really any push and pull there.

It’s interesting because, you could have put, say, Danny in the Chris role of the story, and made him the one that really has that give/take with Bella. Instead, he seems to be moving a bit further into the backdrop, amongst the other guys, while Chris continues to push forward. For entirely biased reasons, I do enjoy that.

This was actually a very long chapter, and I loved that, as well. We’re seeing great breakthroughs with Bella – she’s beginning to admit to having some kinky bones after all, and she’s warming up to people that, in the beginning, it seemed she’d always hate. Hell, if she can learn to tolerate TJ, anything is possible!

Awwwwww that was an amazing chapter( , as always!) and I cant help but tear up at the end. Little Bella becomes theirs..... I hope it lasts because they are so cute, Chris and Her, and Tyler and Her.... Tyler being a daddy hah? never thought of it but sure that can work.... Danny and craig being pet masters? Or is it TJ ? I hope TJ doesnt hurt her for punching him( which i laughed up until TJ just smiled calmly....creep)

@WednesdaysCoffin
That's a good question about TJ, I would have to say he's kind of on the opposite side of what Chris is doing. He isn't worried about trying to impress Bella...in a way he's not worried about her loving him, as he knows she will still at least follow his orders the same way she's expected to with everyone else. I will be honest though and say that their relationship still has a way to go, but they will eventually figure out the true dynamic between the two of them! I hope that made sense!

As far as new chapters...I'm just finishing up the next one and it should be posted in the next 2-3 hours!

@BlackVeilsinWhite
I will admit, I didn't put enough thought into why Chris was "dressing up," but that definitely makes sense. Now, if Bella loves Tyler as is and Chris feels like he needs to compensate a bit, where does that leave TJ? lol He's going to need to get surgery to get Bella's approval! Poor dude!

As for the protein thing, just a thought. That's how my mind works, apparently.

You know I always look forward to a new chapter. :)

@Motionless.Rinio

Thank you so much, that's so sweet! To be honest with you the spanking was just the beginning...


@WednesdaysCoffin
Thank you very much :)
It's interesting that you point out that when Chris takes the lead, he goes the extra steps to set up for the scene if you will. Whereas Tyler can just be himself, as he knows that Bella already loves him and trusts that anything he does will keep her safe. Which means Chris feels like he has a lot to prove in a way and that's why we see him dressing up, and giving her extra attention!

I've heard that there's protein in semen, haha. I didn't think about that at all when I wrote that little snippet. I can't deny or confirm that TJ did that...but let's just all think about it...it's TJ, so who knows.

The next chapter or two will at least lean towards giving Bella the option to discover that pain is a lot better when as you put it 'pleasure' is involved.

Thanks again to both of you for sticking by this story and giving such great feedback! <3

Another great chapter! As always!

I have to admit that the sexiest part for me, the part I enjoyed most, was Chris putting Bella into position and then whispering in her ear. That intimacy is far sexier to me than just whacking someone with a belt, cane, crop, etc. I like that he takes the lead – and dresses up for his role, too! – and takes the time to make sure that she’s in a good headspace.

On a similar note, Bella waking up in the basement and the first person she sees is Tyler . . . That made me smile. I think if it had been anyone else, she might have run screaming.

Thirdly, the green protein smoothie that TJ concocted? Do you know that there’s protein in semen? Because, yeah, that’s where my mind went on that one! Fucking TJ, man!

Which, non-story related, I loved the “Voices” video but not seeing Devin made me so very sad. ☹

Cycling back to the story, I think it was a great chapter. Bella’s opening up and becoming more comfortable with her own desires, although, this was quite the ass-beating. Hopefully, soon, she will discover that the pain is so much more worthwhile when there’s tons of pleasure (err, penis) involved! Lol

Lastly, I kind of like that tiny little Ricky was the heavy-hitter. That was amusing!

Happy Memorial Day! :)

Oh mu GOD!!!!!! MAY I PLEASE PLAY INTHE STORY JUST TO HAVE CHRIS SPANK ME? XD kidding but the feeling i had from this was damn..... oh god i got the chills now. Good chapter... REALLY amazing Chapter

@WednesdaysCoffin
You aim, and you hit the bullseye!

I won't comment too much on your point that most submissive are rather control in their everyday life because I feel like no matter what I said on that, I might give a way little bits of what's to come in the future, and I don't want to do that quite yet. What you said though does make perfect sense for real world scenarios!

I share your passion for Chris/Bella kink - by far the most fun scenes to write!
The new chapter I just posted contains some of that said kink , so I hope you enjoy!

@BlackVeilsinWhite
*bows* Thank you, thank you. I always aim for some comedic relief. :)

I don't think the conversation or the entry of Sam as a pov/main character for the chapter was bad at all. While it was a little random (I mean, you chose him as the random guy to get the focus of attention, right?), but it's not sudden; it's surprising in a good way. I don't think it's jarring or doesn't fit the story - it's a good surprise.

I think Bella's reaction is pretty natural. In fact, so far as I am aware, most true submissives tend to be people who are in tight control of their everyday lives, and they use submission as an escape from the stress. Which would tend to suggest that someone who is lacking control entirely in their non-sexual life wouldn't gravitate toward submission. So, for Bella to be willing to accept her desires, she may need more control of her life outside of the basement. Again, it makes perfect sense. To me, anyway. :)

Semi-kinky Chris/Bella will always be welcomed over here!

You are very welcome! Thank you for tolerating my repeated stupidity! :)

@WednesdaysCoffin
First off, that fire crotch comment had me in tears, that was the last thing I was expecting to hear, but damn was that funny! I'm glad you enjoyed how their relationships grew from that conversation, one fear of mine was that it might come off to random or sudden, or even long and boring, but I knew it was important to get into the plot, and thought this was a perfect opportunity to sneak it in.

You're once gain fully correct about Bella and how it's a very give and take relationship in regards to the guys. That is definitely going to be even more so apparent in the next chapter, and you'l get to see a definite change in what Bella is willing to so when she' given the chance to do things at her pace and without them just barking orders at her. I'm hoping you'll really enjoy it, especially because there will be some Bella and Chris semi-kinky moments.

Thank you as always for your kind words!!!

I was a little shocked - in the very best way! - to see a notification for an update, but so thrilled.

So, in our comments below, you said you'd researched a little for the story, and I decided I should do the same. I saw the name Sam Bettley, had no idea who that was, so I looked him up. Not bad. He's a fire crotch, huh? :P (I say that lovingly!)

As for the update, I love that through a simple conversation, you've really deepened some of the connections (Sam and Bella, Chris and Bella), and given a good background to one of the "lesser known" characters (Sam). He doesn't get as much airtime as some of the others, but I like that now we get a better feel for him, why he is here, and that he has even struggled. I like that there's a guy in the house that is sympathetic to Bella and also had doubts about the situation. So many of them seem blindly gung-ho, which makes Sam's apprehension refreshing.

I feel like the more "space" Bella is given, the more she is allowed to truly bloom. By that I mean that when the guys are not just pushing, pushing, pushing, she tends to be more willing to open up. Clearly she loves and trusts Tyler, but in order for her to love and trust the others they need to be more accepting of her hesitation, at times. It seems like the more they take steps back and allow Bella her moments, the more she is willing to allow them theirs. A nice give and take, if you will.

Also, love "The Bella Whisperer" for Tyler!

A wonderful update as always! :)

@WednesdaysCoffin
Oops my bad, I was referring to Max Green. The main reason I knew about that was when I first started writing this book I looked a fair amount into the bands histories and saw that he kept popping up in and out of Escape the Fates past and present members.

I'm I'm 100% agreeance with your pony tail comment, haha!

My week wasn't too bad, an so hope yours was great as well!

@BlackVeilsinWhite
I don’t actually know anything about Max leaving/returning to ETF. I actually don’t even know Max . . . Green? I don’t know. There are a lot of people in this story that I just nod at the name and have no clue what the guy looks like. Which shows you how completely clueless I am! I usually know the band’s name, vaguely their music, but have no clue what any of the members look like!

I’m glad I’m analyzing Chris/Bella correctly. Might be embarrassing if I said something way, way off point. But that said, Chris can pull my pigtails ANY day he’d like!

I hope you’re having a great week! :)

@WednesdaysCoffin
Boo on the website! Sometimes it can be a pain in the ass, but I don't bad talk it too much or it'l probably shut down on me, lol.

the main thing I was referring to with ETF was the craziness of Max leaving, coming back, and then even being in falling reverse for that short while.

Its funny that you mentioned the paddle, because I also imagine that it would hurt more than a crop...that was actually purposeful though- for her to choose that.

I love hearing your take on Bella and Chris, so never feel like you'e a broken record on that- I really enjoy seeing your point of view about them- because you nail it on the head every time, and it's great to see that that is getting portrayed correctly! (Ps...pulling pigtails might be right up Chris' alley ;) )

I wont say too much about why Tyler did what he did this chapter because I'm trying to get their dynamic nailed down, despite knowing that they both are in actual love with each other.

it isn't a real tour, and I don' think it ever was. I would pay a shameful amount of money to see that though.

you're theory about Bella and feeling shame is a good one, and it will get figured out pretty soon!

I'm so glad that you liked this chapter and you can never over comment I promise!

@Motionless.Rinio

The next chapter will be a little bit more lax, but still have a few fun little possible naughty bits or lines. Thank you so much for the kind words, and I am so happy that you liked this chapter, it was one of my faves as well!

A super long, super scrumptious chapter! Let me see if I can break down my thoughts semi-coherently, here:

Firstly, choosing a paddle over a riding crop? That seems crazy to me. Paddles hurt, especially wooden ones. Holy shit!

Kinky fuckery aside, I will always love the dynamic between Bella and Chris. I know, I’m like a broken record. They are just . . . I envision when you’re a little kid and they say, “You always pull the pigtails of the one you love.” Chris knows how to get under Bella’s skin and he does it to evoke a reaction. He’s like the little boy that keeps tugging the pigtails, over and over and over. She just hasn’t quite figured out that, in order for him to get that reaction, she has to in some way enjoy his poking and prodding her.

For the record, Chris whispering “He’s no fun” made me giggle like a dork.

I also like that, here, we are seeing Tyler step back a little. He could have stepped in – and in a small way did, a tiny bit – but he more or less allowed Chris and Bella to play out their scene in front of him. Which is foretelling of the future, I think. Well done!

Totally unrelated, but a Blessthefall, FIR, ETF, MIW tour would be kind of cool! (If that’s a real thing that’s been announced or happened in the past, wow, okay, I’m out of the loop.)

Not gonna lie: the scene with Danny was kind of hot. Damn that Brit bastard!

It’s interesting to dip into Bella’s mind a little and see that she really seems to fear relinquishing any control. She actually feels guilty for feeling pleasure! Which is probably more about who the pleasure is coming from, and not really the pleasure itself. Or, at least, that’s my theory for now.

Another great chapter that I way over-commented on! lol

I can't wait for the next chapter honestly. And please I know this will sound EXTREMELY weird and SLIGHTLY disturbing but I got a bit.... Tiny winey excited with Chris spanking Bella.... I'm weird I know but the whole story is just gosh.... Its like you through me a picture of Chris being a hot Master and you expect me to not do things while looking ( ok... That was an EW moment ) but you get what I mean? Its extremely awesomre and a beautiful book in general but this chapter was the money !!!